Critique Request Fire Bird Project

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Hi Guys!
This is my new design project Fire Bird!
I would be happy to hear constructive comments!
 

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Gemsetterchris

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Looks fantastic Eric :thumbs up:
You certainly have some computer art skills....

Only thing i noticed after a while is a few small scrolls appear to be "growing" from the wrong direction?


I can`t give a proper opinion on the overall design as that is beyond my level but to me it looks superb.
 
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Hopefully someone will come along & correct or agree with my couple of pointed out "bits" or does it not matter :confused:

Would be rather helpful to know either way.....
 

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Eric, that looks lovely. In addition to Chris' comments, the only thing I would add is to be careful of the area behind the bird. Try to keep your scrolls spiraling nicely, unfortunately in this area it almost looks as if you have a straight line formed by the backs of the scrolls. It really draws the eye which is a shame because your cutting looks lovely. Overall though, a very nice piece indeed. Well done.
 
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Yes Chris and Marcus. I can see a couple of areas that might not be just right (the straight line you pointed out, Marcus), but when I look at the overall piece it's quite nicely done and beautifully shaded and I tend not to think about them so much. As Marcus said, it's well done and a very nice piece of work. :beerchug:
 

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Looks really great Eric.
Yes some mistakes like Sam and Marcus are pointing on but nice to look at.
It seems to me you made a lot of progress. On your designs, cutting and shading.
Also curious what computer program you used for the design?

arnaud
 

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Eric, my favorite part is the bird. Very imaginative and well done. Here is a suggestion for another option with the scroll in the middle. Redraw the medium sized scroll that sits just above the wing and goes clockwise. Redraw it so it goes counterclockwise and comes off of the medium sized scroll just below it instead of the large scroll. If it goes underneath the wing don't worry about it. Then redraw the large scroll with just a bit more curve to it. There are other ways to change the scroll design but this is quite simple to do and will have a significant effect on the appearance. This is a piece that I like a lot and isn't it fun to see other possibilities.
 

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Gemsetterchris

Hi Chris!
Many thanks for your observation!
I was interested in design and made a grave mistake!
Thank you noticed it! I corrected!
 

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Sam Alfano

Hi Sam!
Thank you for your comment!
Tell me how many degrees (acute) should be Graver for shading?
 

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Marcus Hunt

Hi Marcus!
Thank you for your comment!
Thank you so much, that drew my attention to the line behind the birds!
Tell me how many degrees (acute) should be Graver for shading?
 

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Cloudy

Hi Cloudy!
Thanks for the kind words addressed to my work!
 

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Arnaud Van Tilburgh

Hi Arnaud!
Thank you for your kind words!

I used:
Tablet WACOM Intuos3 A3
Adobe Illustrator CS5 (for drawing spirals).
Rest of the work I did in the program Autodesk SketchBook Pro 5.0 (2011)!

SketchBook Pro 5.0 - an interesting program!
It is much more primitive than Adobe Photoshop.
SketchBook Pro 5.0 is designed specifically for drawing!
The most interesting feature - a mirror-drawing!

I strongly recommend this program to create a design!
Look Movie
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ojzlnLF-mho
 
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Lee Griffiths

Hi Lee!
Thanks for the kind comments about my work!

I thank you for your advice!
 

Christian DeCamillis

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My impression when i saw it was very nice ! I would suggest one thing . On the next project cut on the outside of your original outline drawing and see what happens. Your finished result will be even better because your design will include the drawn line that makes your leafs and it will change your proportions to what you originally drew. It won't be a difference that is too drastic but it will make a difference to what your drawing is.
 

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Tira Mitchell

Hi Tira!
Yes you are right, when I made listening to music!
Several times put the melody from the Film "Romeo and Juliet!

It's a medal, I'm going to do for his beloved wife, Helen!
 

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