Critique Request Drawingattempt

Adder · Jan 7, 2014

Hello again. I got a lot of tips from members in a former tread on this forum. They all said that I had to draw and practice with my pencil to understand how the patterns work. During christmasholiday I gave it a try. Here is my first serious attempt on a "scrolldesign". Feel free to give criticism. I think maybe the second scroll is not what it should be. Agree?

Recards

JÃ¸rn-Ove

monk · Jan 7, 2014

consistent design elements. a bit rough, but improvements will follow, i'm sure. rather good for your first one.

Southern Custom · Jan 8, 2014

The form is there. And your understanding of it is evident. If my first attempts had been this good I'd be a happy man. Take a good look at your spines for a start. Width, consistency, and the way your leaves connect on the inside. Compare that to some top end work. It's all in the small details now and that only comes with a whole lot of practice.
Keep it coming!
Layne

Adder · Jan 8, 2014

Thank you for the feedback. I have taken the advise from you Monk and redraw it with some few changes(and thinner lines)

I will do as you say Layne, see how the masters do it and redraw until the design is "perfect"

JÃ¸rn-Ove

monk · Jan 9, 2014

better i should say. you're far better making errors on paper at first. be it practice plates, or the real deal.

Julia.J · Jan 10, 2014

I know so little about scroll designs, that I find it difficult to give any good feedback; but I can tell what I see

There's a lot going on in this drawing! Crit first: I'm feeling puzzled- wondering if it's because of the elements all being in equal size or that there's not enough space between the different swirls and leaves that it makes me uncertain of where or what I should be looking at. Remember that you don't have to fill in every gap to make a design interesting. On the bright side I see that you're testing different things along with the fact that your line looks like it's improving with every post; I'd say keep creating and keep us happy by posting more!

~Julia

Adder · Mar 5, 2014

Attempt again

Hi, I have taken advice from you all and tried to make another drawing. This time, after drawing, I engraved it to on a knifeblade I found in my drawer. It`s still a lot of improvement to make though, but I`m feel that I`m getting somwhere....I hope.

JÃ¸rn-Ove

monk · Mar 5, 2014

looks better on the piece of steel than on the paper.

fortpaso · Mar 5, 2014

That looks great!

Willem Parel · Mar 5, 2014

I like what I see, nice style, nice fold overs,nice shading, nice cutting :thumbsup:

Adder · Mar 6, 2014

Thank you all for the feedback. I really appreciate it. :thumbsup:

If anyone would like to engrave it for practice, your all welcome :graver:

Now, back to drawing :pencil:

. Have to improve my skills.

Regards
JÃ¸rn-Ove

LVVP · Mar 7, 2014

JÃ¸rn-Ove ,

Keep it on your archive and one day you will show this drawing for your students as you first steps into your great career
Good luck!

Adder · Dec 17, 2014

Another attempt

Hi everyone. I have been reading this forum almoust every day since I signed up. Unfortunately I have not have enough time to draw and practice this year, but maybe next year?

Here is another attempt

Feel free to give me critique

Regards
JÃ¸rn-Ove

Jan Hendrik · Dec 17, 2014

I think this latest drawing is a very fine design. Well done!

Ed Westerly · Dec 17, 2014

My eye is drawn to the bald spot at the bottom left just to the right of the origin. You need some fill-in there. Otherwise looks quite nice.

atexascowboy2011 · Dec 17, 2014

#3 as Monkeyman said is EXCELLENT !

Jan Hendrik · Dec 17, 2014

atexascowboy2011 said:
#3 as Monkeyman said is EXCELLENT !

Who the heck is monkeyman?

Adder · Dec 17, 2014

Ed Westerly said:
My eye is drawn to the bald spot at the bottom left just to the right of the origin. You need some fill-in there. Otherwise looks quite nice.

Yes you right Bruce. I agree. Something missing there, or something is wrong with the whole part of the origin. Any suggestions?

And thank you all for comments, also bad ones. I am nearly 50 years old so I will tolerate them without problems

JÃ¸rn-Ove

JJ Roberts · Dec 17, 2014

Adder,Two good books on the drawing and understanding of scrolls are Advanced Drawing of Scrolls by Ron Smith and Lee Griffin's book. :thumbsup:

J.J.

Adder · Dec 17, 2014

Thank you JJ. I have already ordered and "wrapped in" Lee Griffin`s book. It will be my own christmasgift from my children

I will follow your advice, so the next book will probably be Ron Smith`s :drawing:

JÃ¸rn-Ove

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